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OctPoWriMo Day 17

Hello poetry lovers,

The prompt is interesting but I'm unsure about the result:


My thoughts are points
from a laser
I have to connect
My thoughts are lines of lasers
acting like guards
I have to skip

I obsessively dream
of my other life
as it leaves
polite echoes
in my mind
throughout the day

I'm trapped in my own mind
a statue by my thoughts
it feels like a punishment
like I have to book it
or I can stay
and write a book
to free myself.

Love, Fida

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Anonymous said…
That feels so much like what I went through last summer. I felt frozen into place.
I only managed to snap out of it after I let my words out...

It's a lovely poem.
October 17, 2014 at 9:27 AM
Rod E. Kok said…
No need to be unsure of this one. It is really good!
October 17, 2014 at 11:53 AM
Crystal Collier said…
Those first two lines are epic. =)
October 17, 2014 at 3:03 PM
Unknown said…
Obsessively dream of my other life... so true... we all have many lives of who we are.... this captured that feeling.
October 17, 2014 at 6:07 PM
seekingmeme said…
Wonderful response to the prompt!
October 17, 2014 at 9:01 PM
Sunita said…
Fida...this poem of yours captures something akin among us.
October 18, 2014 at 1:12 AM
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